At first glance
“Me Talk Pretty One Day” by David Sedaris and The Nuts and Bolts of College Writing by Michael Harvey seem
completely different. One is a humorous narrative chocked full of dialogue and characterization;
one is short book describing the proper way to use punctuation, paragraphs, and
personalization. However, on closer inspection it becomes apparent that some of
the basic guidelines for college writing, outlined in The Nuts and Bolts are apparent in “Me Talk Pretty.”
While Sedaris
follows Harvey’s advice for most of his essay (actually an excerpt from his
book, Me Talk Pretty One Day), he
falls sort within the first few sentences of his essay. The second sentence of the first
paragraph is very long-winded and goes against the main point of Harvey’s first
chapter: Concision. Sedaris demonstrates the opposite with this sentence:
“After paying my tuition, I was issued a student ID, which allows me
a discounted entry fee at movie theaters, puppet shows, and Festyland, a
far-flung amusement park that advertises with billboards picturing a cartoon
stegosaurus sitting in a canoe and eating what appears to be a ham sandwich."
This shows snippets of
Sedaris’ student life in Paris, but it’s so long and rambling that the reader
can get confused. Following Harvey’s advice, simplifying sentences makes them
shorter and stronger, resulting in a more concise message. On page six Harvey
states “…adverbs add nothing to the already strong verbs. They are just races
of the pompous style in otherwise good sentences.” With Sedaris’ depiction of
Festyland, it is easy to get lost in the linking verbs and passive
descriptions.
However,
for the most part Sedaris does an excellent job carrying out the guidelines of Nuts and Bolts, particularly with chapter
three’s topic: Flow.
On page twenty-three Harvey says, “…good essays should unfold like
stores…showing characters doing things or being described,” This is one of
Sedaris’ strengths. The action in his essay revolves around interactions with
his teacher. Whether through direct dialogue or describing the interactions
unfolding before him, Sedaris treats it as a story. Following Harvey’s advice,
he controls how the reader moves from character to character by handing off
passages with new dialogue. On page twelve Sedaris begins with the two Polish Annas,
then moving to the teacher’s direct dialogue with them. From there he starts
the next paragraph with a recollection of the first Anna’s reaction, followed by
the second Anna’s failure, and brief summary of their bewilderment. This flow
of character interaction hands the reader to a new character for each
paragraph. In addition to using consistent flesh-and-blood characters, Sedaris
also uses abstract characters - ideas or fact: the confusion of the individual
students, the challenges of the language, or his own discomfort in the
situation (as demonstrated in the second and third paragraphs of page fourteen).
“My fear and discomfort
crept beyond the borders of the classroom . . . “
“My only comfort was the
knowledge I was not alone,”
In accordance with Harvey’s
guidelines, there is a key word/phrase used to transition between paragraphs.
In this case they are comfort and discomfort.
Tackling his uncomfortable experience from several different
angles, for the most part Sedaris utilizes the advice given in The Nuts and Bolts of Collage Writing,
creating a clear and effective essay.
You really only discuss two topics from Harvey here, and one--concision--is not covered with real effectiveness. The Sedaris sentence you feature is an example of an author piling on comic details to create an effect. On balance, what do you see in the entire essay? That's right--concision: simple word choices and relatively short sentences. =)
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