Women Don't Want To Be Married, We Just Want To Be Rich" by Jennifer Wright covers a topic dealing with our society's "right of passage": marriage. Arguing that some don't necessarily need to look for a husband to start a family, Wright communicates her options through clear syntax and diction.
Wright used syntax in a variety of sentence lengths. Using compound sentences to eloquently explain her reasoning communicates a thought-out argument. Scattered throughout these longer sentences are shorter sentence fragments. These communicate Wright's more immediate thoughts. ("You are an industry.") These choppy, short sentences mimic ones actual thought pattern, allowing the reader to almost hear Wright's thoughts and opinions, almost as if she's speaking what springs immediately to mind. The structure of the sentences shorter sentences take the form of declarative sentences. They are assertive - a statement. ("Just do it. Even if you're married. Even if you're a bigamist.") By mixing periodic sentences (reflections on details before the subject and verb) and loose sentences (details after the subject and verb) Wright creates a balance of what is happening now, and reflections on past events. Balancing this through longer, more thought-out sentences and shorter, more informal sentences, Wright uses a variety of syntax techniques to get her point across.
Another tool uses to get her point across is diction. Using informal, conversational language to add pauses for reflection ("Well, yes..." "Of course,..." "I suppose...") she mimics the ebb & flow a natural conversation.
By using monosyllabic words in her shorter sentences, and polysyllabic words in her longer ones, she pairs melds similar styles of diction with syntax. Wrights use of varied diction & syntax show off a unique voice in her article, toying with the idea that women don't want to be married, they just want to be rich.
wow! the examples you found in Jennifer Wright's article are really good. I really like writing about the syntactic structures I find throughout the reading because it definitely puts more emphasis. Your findings of shorter sentence fragments scattered within longer ones are interesting. I'll start looking out for those as well! I also envy the way you support your claims. You use literary elements and vocabulary that I easily forget; it's helpful when you assure the reader of declarative and assertive sentences. If I had to tell you something that could help you improve... it would be that you forgot to paste the url of the article for me to read it & that you need one more DIDLS example(:
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I'm not positive but I believe the assignment asks for one more DIDLS example. Of the ones you gave I really like your syntax paragraph. Your examples are great and you do an even better job supporting them. However, I think you should expand your diction paragraph. If you don't have much to say about diction, maybe it would've been better to choose a different article that you could more easily support. You definitely are a great writer and like Gloria said, you use great diction yourself! Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteI like the examples you pulled, and I feel you analyzed them well and thier meanings to the article. Other than that, I agree with Gloria and Alison, but I don't think I just want to simply repeat what they said. Perhaps your last two paragraphs could be longer and contain more context.
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